In Like a Lion
You know how random things make you think of people? For example, the word ‘spoon’ makes me think of the guy who sold me my T-Mobile SIM (don’t ask), and it makes me giggle every time. Or hearing the Zombies “Time of the Season” reminds me that Davis still hasn’t given me the DMB CD… well, this one is for you, D…
Davis
It’s a new haircut,
I say, but you still
don’t notice.
You laughed when
the fringe fell
into my eyes.
Aren’t you supposed
to be able to see?
You brushed it
back behind my
ears, cupped my
face and said,
I am so glad
that we never
fell in love.
Now for some poetry talk- I found the three line stanza to be very effective when I wrote this. It worked like mini-poems (which I guess essentially stanzas can be, eh?) in the way that stanzas create punctuation (much like a line-break). When you re-read it now you’ll realize you do it naturally. Clever trick that poets play on their readers, isn’t it? The little snippets and breaks force you, dear reader, to stop and pause for a second… and think. Here it works to bring you reader through the motions of this intimate scene in a relationship. The punctuation marks the emotion. Brilliant how that works, isn’t it?
Sxx
PS- OK, so it’s the day after I posted this and I realized that it’s not letting me post the thing in 3 lines stanzas… so just pretend they are there, because they should be. x
